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Post by bonhommearmonica on May 8, 2015 11:12:58 GMT -6
Teaser
Operation Rebirth: And on the tenth day
Future Colt Farm
A blonde with short cut hair had tears in her eyes. Country music played and filled the Air..
Andros was working on a hover bike with the com on, "You know what is messed up Old lady.. I was working on this same damn bike at the same time.. Last iteration and the same Mont Gen song was playing.. How is the world treating the prettiest girl in the world.. "
Austin looks at Andros with out his shirt on and bit her tongue..
Andros hears a meow, "You stay out of this.. Your .."
"Meow.."
"Little man.. I am not in Vegas.." Austin had tears in her eyes, "I.. I caught you on the holo at the RNC.. You took down the sitting President Clearing the Way for James."
Andros turns to the cat sitting on the grass next to Austin, "Thanks for the heads up little lady.." Andros puts down the weird looking tool. "I am up for another pulitzer for that.."
"You remember that first night you dirty old man.. You told me I was always welcomed here. I dont have anywhere else to go," Austin looked at andros straight in the eyes.."I have known for years Andros that you remembered everything.. Faking being a scared 14 year old.. Letch explained to me you did it to protect me from your daughter.." Austin took a deep breath as a tear fell, "I cant believe she was mama.. When Letch shot Teddy I thought he had flipped.."
"Austin.. I.. I love you.." Andros's palms were sweating which made him laugh, "I.. I never gave up on you Austin and your sister is partially mad about it.."
Austin kisses Andros as the sun shines brightly on her.. "Alexander is an Ass and fired me.. He won the syndicate in poker game in Vegas which included the Casino I worked at.. Little Alex is not the same little kid.. He shipped the dons to his dad on the lunar command.. Then told me that he decided I need to come talk with you.."
"Wait till you see how Helos grew up.. " Andros grins as he takes Austins hand..
"Wait.. You knew I was coming," Austin pauses when she sees an old lady walk out of the main house. "Nana Colt.. She hates me.. She thinks I took your innocence."
"She pissed me off.. We have agreed to not discuss to many things," The cows mooed to Andros's conversation.. "I still have not completely forgave her Austin.."
Nana Colt hobbled down to where Austin was, "Ms. Parker.." Elizabeth Parker sighs, "I see you have not changed to much.."
"Mama.." Andros growled, "Austin is moving in with me.. "
Elizabeth Colt narrowed her eyes and then Sighs.. "I like Diana better.. " Nana Colt shook her head, "Doctor Lucy Bach called.. She told me to behave When Austin got here. "
"Mrs. Colt.. I apologize for," Austin looked down in shame.. "It was .."
"Mama.. "
"Austin.. " Nana colt shook her head, "I do not appreciate being lied to by either of you.. Andros Nicodemus Colt.. You broke my heart son.."
"Mama.. Fine.. I told you not to ever make me choose between Austin and you.. You would lose.. Your still my mama but The same conversation we had many years ago.."
"Still stands," Elizabeth Colt shakes her head. " You sound just like your Damn Grand-daddy and have since you were Thirteen or Fourteen.. The Colt men once the love bug bites them it sticks.."
Austin is very Quiet..
"Did you talk with Regina De'Chez mama," Andros Ask..
"NO!" Elizabeth Colt growled, "Her sleeping with you crossed a line.. And dont you pull what your uncle George used to always pull.."
"You did have Sex with Alex's mother," Austin was shocked.. "And.." Austin narrows her eyes.. She takes Elizabeth's arm when she sees her having trouble, "Lets go grab some tea and I will tell you a few other things your son did.. Do you know about Mrs. Sholoche?"
"That huzzy," Elizabeth takes Austins arm.. "Do tell about my son.."
"Well Letch told me," Austin whispers to Elizabeth..
After a few steps, "Andros Nicodemus Colt.. Son," Elizabeth shook her head. " Austin Perhaps I did over react. He gets his ways honest.. Let me tell you about his Grand-daddy young lady and if that does not send you away then I get to laugh at you."
As the two ladies walked to the farm house Andros shook his head. He adjusted his ball cap, "Two women is the chinese sign for trouble.."
Both Girls freeze and respond in unison, "Auntie Jessica.."
"I was never this F.. This spoiled," Jessica rolls her eyes.. "Join the Marines.. See F#$%ing Universe.. Auntie Gretchen is a marine, no problem.." Jessica looks at Stacy, "Remind me to gank every marine corps recruiter I come across.. I should have joined the F#$%ing Air Force."
Both girls giggle..
Two red head boys come running after the two girls and freeze..
"Delano Franklin Colt, Uther James Colt," Jessica is exasperated.. "You four hellions are gonna clean the wood floors.. Together, With tooth brushes.."
"Auntie Jessica.." Delano pauses, "Mama said that the rules clearly.."
"I know what mama Diana said mister latrine Lawyer.." Jesssica Lange closes her eyes, " Before you two little ladies decide to speak.. I also know what Mama Austin said. I am going to kill dad for shanghaiing me into this.."
All four stop and look at Jessica, "Dad?.. "
Abigail sniffs Jessica and then sniffs Stacy, "Thats not possible.. You two smell alike.."
"Abigail.. Leave Auntie Jessica Alone," Andros speaks coldly.. He is smiling as he walks over and hugs Jessica, "Baby girl.."
All four children come running up to Andros..
"Dad.."
"Do not dad me," Andros hugged all four.. "Auntie Stacy gave an order and you will be cleaning the floor."
All four kids got a look on their faces.. "Yes sir.."
"What did they do this time," Diana walks in carrying bags.. She kisses Andros, "Baby.. Sis needs help finishing carrying in groceries.. I think our two hellions.."
Both boys replicate Diana's voice, "Got voluntold to help Mama Austin.."
Both head outside towards the car..
Stacy gets a look from Diana.. "Yes mama Diana," She speaks in Diana's voice.
Diana shakes her head, "I think their Nana Colt is laughing at us from lunar command. That is still creepy and I birthed two of them.."
"Its a poster for birth Control you ask me," Jessica shakes her head.. She sees little Abigail in tears.. "Abigail.. Whats wrong baby.."
"I cant do that.. I am different from them," Abigail looks down.. "I am .."
Andros speaks in Klans speak speak.. For a few minutes..
Austin and the three kids walk back in.. Austin walks over to Abigail and picks her up, "Abigail honey what is wrong.."
Abigail explains in Klans speak speak what is wrong..
"What is she saying Andros," Austin ask? "She is speaking the Klans Creole I think.."
"Abigail," andros walks over.. "Your the only one in the house hold that can learn a language that fast.. I cant even do it without cheating.."
Abigail looks at Austin, "Mama.. You cant speak.. Speak Speak.."
"Baby girl.. I only learned english.." Austin answers..
"Wow Sis.." Uther tries to replicate the Creol Words he heard from Abigail..
Abigail giggles, "Bubba dues it means something different I think from a boys mouth. If dad spoke right. Daddy does this mean I am special?"
"Yes you are.." Andros walks over to Abigail and sighs. He takes her from Austin, "I have a surprise for you.. For all of you.. Uncle Alex has invited us to visit your Nana Parker.. I am bringing this up to all of you as a whole.."
Austin and diana Swallowed hard.. The four kids all start whispering and communicating quietly..
"No.. You will have manners and speak outloud," Jessica spoke calmly.. "And yes Nana Parker is not a boogeyman.. Thats uncle Letch.."
The kids were shocked..
"You know our codes," Stacy looked at Jessica..
Jessica smiles evilly, "You will need your sisters help to create a new code.. She is the Linguist in the Family."
Andros looks at the Mantle and almost tears up as he sees the mantle overflowing with pictures.. He reaches over and pics up the wedding photo and gently touches Austin and Diana's faces..
"Daddy why are you crying," Abigail ask as she wipes the tear from his face?
"They are not tears of sadness.. We did it babygirl," Andros kisses Abigail's forehead.
As Andros hugs Abigail, "Daddy.. Why wont Mama Austin, Mama Diana, Auntie Jessica, Auntie Sandra, Auntie Gretchen, Auntie Lucy, Mrs. June, Nana Colt, or Nana De'Chez let me watch Quantum Leap ?"